Some parents are worried about the increasing level of violence in tv video games and other types of entertainment for childrens leisure.how does this affect children?how do you think problem xan be tackled?
Since , Now a days one of the most intrigued controversial trend to agumenting curiosity to spend most of precious time to watching TV , Video games and entertainment program.So both parents' are worried about perilous risk that can be stimulate by internet and TV. In following paragraph, I would elucidate various problem.
To Commence with parents' prospective point of view , firstly children stuck around a clock to watching screen time programme instead of outdoor activity , they embark procrastinating to prior job such as work , sports activities etc.
Nonetheless , pupils become lethargic physically and mentally.Secondly, most of boys watch cambat shows and play games such as PUB G , Blue Whale etc.that can be harmful to children , increase crime rate in society because children behave like virtual hero's , they have not know difference beetween virtual life and real life.For instance , In couple of years , blue whale game launched that was played by younger if they can not complete their task then they are mentally disturb and has lost live.Additionally more , Viewer keep up some stuff of movies , music in their mind and follow them same as in real life.
Undoubtly , Every lock has a key.Some solution should be implemented parents' should set up some restriction to how much time thay should spend on screen time gadget otherwise watching too much TV can alter perception of them.Secondly , parents should install software which provide lock and password facilities , Thus parents should expelled few prone sites.Thirdly , government should took up stringent forward steps to mitigated the crime .State should burgeoning some regulation and eject action movies otherwise precarious change happened in society.
To recapitulate, I can acknowlegde that screen time crippled mentally and physically weaker to pupil by guise of non-stop entertainment through various channel.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51211072664 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03132893344 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664359861592 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 48.0 20.2975951904 236% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 202.448690345 49.4020404114 410% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 265.5 106.682146367 249% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 48.1666666667 20.7667163134 232% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.3333333333 7.06120827912 245% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 32.0 5.01903807615 638% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169312898786 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071935979465 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430015828056 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0797218230012 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456838619225 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.6 13.0946893788 218% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 22.76 50.2224549098 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.0 11.3001002004 195% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.57 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.61 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 21.2 10.1190380762 210% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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