Some people argue that immigrants should adopt the local culture when immigrating to a new country. An alternative view is that they can adapt to a new environment by establishing a minority community. Discuss these both two views and give your opinion.

There is always has been a debate on whether immigrants should blend in with the local people's traditions and customs, or it should not be affected by anyone's way of living. It is a tough decision for people who want to start a new life in a new country. In this essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion.

Let's start by looking at what would happen, if immigrants adopted the new local culture. First of all, it is highly probable that they will pick up the new language much quicker, which means they will have no difficulties in making friends and building relationship with their boss and coworkers. Starting a new life from scratch is troublesome, it requires as much support as we can have, so it is wise to connect with people surrounding us in order to get much help when needed. For example, when these people build good rapports with everyone, they may even ask the neighborhood to take care of the kids in emergency cases, or even get promoted quickly than those who do not.

On the other hand, establishing a minority community can be ideally suggested, especially when the cultural gap between the host country and a foreign destination are hard to be bridged. For instance, Japanese people tend to reply by "Hai" - which means "yes" - for every question. It is no doubt that this will confuse businessman from all around the world while doing business with them. Furthermore, people from that community who share the same beliefs can cooperate, sharing knowledge and experience with those have just landed to the foreign country. By the same token, people who are feeling left behind can share their difficulties to the whole group to stay out of stress.

In conclusion, there are good points in both sides of view. Personally, I think that it is best if the immigrants can find the balance between both scenarios, so they keep their cultural values without feeling isolated.

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Suggestion: Let's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, look, may, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, no doubt, first of all, by the same token, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84242424242 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6962189188 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587878787879 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8082035699 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.142857143 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2142857143 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285578986826 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957502506431 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580025738652 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180351700235 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0763493426102 0.056905535591 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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