Some people believe that for children learning about the local history is more important than knowing the World history. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In contemporary schools, local history is introduced more important than world history. Although this subject depend on educational syllabuses of schools due to their social and cultural condition totally, I think both histories are appropriate and should be studied .
History is defined as a best teacher and distinctive nations have different history which has been identified as its herb. In other word nowhere do we not find without history even where was discovered lately. I think children should know about their past why it is so important to teach kids what has been passed on a society, in fact the culture of every community is depended on its history. So that if we are to correlate our children with our culture and civilization, history could be known as a first step. Local history also contain diverse experiences whish all are unique due to a nation in other word children, belonging to a specific nation, are affected by past of their society, moreover this fact encourage their nationality sensation.
On the other hand, history of global also should be taught, inasmuch as it is full of successful and unsuccessful experience which its variety is very more than local history. Children could be sophisticated by knowing about different experiences and event, in addition achieving of great men and women during the history may encourage them to make effort more. Never do we forget that the society won’t be successful only if its children be successful. So that we could define world history as a best aspiration for our kids regardless other benefits which we could obtain from.
On the whole both local and world history could be introduced as a basic necessity for children because of nationality sensation and aspiration.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, moreover, so, i think, in addition, in fact, on the whole, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1469.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10069444444 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80577394466 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1217488826 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.416666667 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257354129741 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107980889573 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692988389481 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171424069277 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174222079091 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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