Some people believe that children’s success in adulthood is related to the way they have been raised by their parents. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion and examples.
Everyone wants to register for the treasure of success in this contemporary world. Presently, some people are of the opinion that success of adults depend a lot on the way they have been brought up by their parents. Here, I would like to accord with the given statement.
There are manifold points to endorse my point of view. First and foremost, quality education provided by guardians is vital to make adolescents successful in their lives. To illustrate, most of juveniles are sent to supreme schools by their parents in order to attain excellent academic skills. Hence, children are expected to become successful doctors, engineers, bank managers and other professionals in their upcoming lives. What is more, parents nourish their off springs with social, moral and cultural values that enable them to succeed in their lives.
Further emphasizing on my point of view, many international sports personalities give credit to their parents for making them owner of success. Taking a real life example into consideration, Mahender Singh Dhoni who is a prominent cricketer and former captain of Indian team always appreciate to his father for making him a global star. In his interviews, he mentioned that his father used to encourage him for playing cricket and also sent him to cricket academy for taking trainings from top class trainers. He added that he was motivated by his father to play for long hours in order to become international player. Last but not least, guardians are veteran of life stages and they always guide and support their children socially, emotionally and financially in their journeys of breakthrough. Thus, it is true that parents set the foundation of successful careers of their adolescents. On the contrary, opposite wind is also there.
To commence with, some people did not get much support from their parents but they have accomplished name and fame just because of their talent and hard work. My friend Sajjan Kumar is a perfect example, he got the job of teacher in government school by his own efforts. His parents are not only illiterate but also very poor. He did part time job for managing his study outlay and burnt midnight oil for getting this job even he was not given proper guidance and support.
To recapitulate, undeniably, some people are great examples of success that is attained own their own. However, parents always have a big hand behind the success of millions of people.
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Essay evaluation report
success of adults depend a lot on the way they have been brought up by their parents
the success of adults depends a lot on the way they have been brought up by their parents
flaws:
No. of Words: 404 while No. of Different Words: 228
the example is too long in the third paragraph. To remove this issue, better to have 4 paragraphs with two reasons in the second/third paragraph. try this pattern:
paragraph 1: introduction. Your ideas/opinions here.
paragraph 2: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side A. First, ... Second, ...
paragraph 3: However, still I support side B. first,... Second, ... //put the support side in this paragraph
paragraph 4: conclusion.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 1979 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.899 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.583 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.238 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.872 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.476 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.27 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 75, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se my point of view. First and foremost, quality education provided by guardians ...
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Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the juveniles') or simply say ''most juveniles''.
Suggestion: most of the juveniles; most juveniles
...ccessful in their lives. To illustrate, most of juveniles are sent to supreme schools by their pa...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...able them to succeed in their lives. Further emphasizing on my point of view, many i...
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Line 7, column 206, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ample into consideration, Mahender Singh Dhoni who is a prominent cricketer and f...
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Line 9, column 335, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...y illiterate but also very poor. He did part time job for managing his study outlay and b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, so, thus, it is true, on the contrary, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2047.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 404.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06683168317 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67413237746 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569306930693 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7755583914 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4761904762 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2380952381 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 7.06120827912 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 8.67935871743 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198901364051 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063657497138 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845828099939 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13846153576 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702656922903 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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