In life, people will definitely face a great deal of challenges. Some people may just accept those hardships, while others will struggle to improve the situations. In my opinion, it is better that people should strive to change their undesirable conditions.
When facing hardships, some people have a tendency to accept those situations. This is because, they are not ready to face the risks. For the example, an employee with low wages actually has an option to quit from his current job. On the contrary, this is a very unsafe option for someone with high debts like him. If he quits his current job, he will be unemployed for some period of time; therefore, he will not receive any money, which will only hamper him from clearing all of his debts. It is obvious that some people's striving for changes will only result in exacerbated conditions.
On the other hand, other people will react differently towards difficult circumstances. The reason for this is they have strong will to make things better. To illustrate, my grand father did not have any capital at all to start his own business at first. He then borrowed some money to buy equipment and rice to be sold. He was not afraid to face the risk that he would not be able to pay the loan. As a result, he finally succeeded in building his own business. If he had not dared to take the risks, he would not have been able to start his own business.
In conclusion, some people tend to take no action toward difficult situations, while others will always attempt to change the conditions. Personally, people should take necessary actions to improve those circumstances.
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Dear, e -rater what is still
Dear, e -rater what is still wrong with my essay? Do u have any advice? Thanks. God bless
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Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 376, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ent job, he will be unemployed for some period of time; therefore, he will not receive any mon...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1352.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77738515901 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57819318969 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547703180212 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.0242950154 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.1111111111 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7222222222 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77777777778 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163541859887 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059816653634 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487534056428 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118079018684 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386680819376 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.0946893788 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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