Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is obvious that some unfortunate circumstances, such as disappointing job or miserable living conditions, are inevitable in many people’s lives. While I understand that changes can be full of risks; therefore many choose to accept their existing condition, I personally believe that we should strive to improve our lives regardless of the outcome so that we can live life to the fullest.
On the one hand, a host of people have a tendency towards facing up to the undesirable situations for fear of worsened/ exacerbated results. In order to better their living standards, one would definitely have to put a great deal of effort or even sacrifice their current job to seek new opportunities. However, this could result in more hardships, especially for those who play a role as a breadwinner of the family. In fact, they even ended up becoming unemployed for a period of time, creating more financial burdens on the whole family. Clearly, striving for changes might bring nothing but more financial distress.
Nonetheless, I am of the opinion that only through overcoming hardships can people get the most out of every precious moment of life. Those who dare to face adversity will become more resilient and determined, helping them become a better person over time. A prime example is Nicholas James Vujicic, who is a renowned motivational speaker born with tetra-amelia syndrome. Throughout his early life, he struggled not only with the typical challenges of school and adolescence such as bullying but he also struggled with extreme depression, and anxiety. However, instead of letting his disability deter his life, he took it as a challenge, using it to change his life as well as other millions of lives.
In conclusion, while changes can be risky at times, I believe that they bring more benefits to the betterment of people’s lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... facing up to the undesirable situations for fear of worsened/ exacerbated result...
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Line 3, column 474, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...even ended up becoming unemployed for a period of time, creating more financial burdens on the...
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Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the betterment of people's lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nonetheless, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1561.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11803278689 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9667076827 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616393442623 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7269856176 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.076923077 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4615384615 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.38461538462 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105579486869 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0349271041221 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373795092546 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0669433646686 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310288891142 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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