Hardships are something inevitable in people's life journey. Reacting to these situations, some people will only accept the current situation, while the others will struggle to change the circumstances. I personally agree with the latter opinion, where people have to fight for their life instead of just accepting the bad situations.
In life, many different moments will occur, including the bad ones. Some people may react differently to it, including those who tend to just accept the situations. For the example, an employee is working in a bank where he is paid with unsatisfactory wages. He has an option to resign from his job, but never does it. The reason is because of his fear of getting a exacerbate situation, where the opportunity to not be accepted in new workplaces is bigger. So instead of struggling to improve his condition, he choose to accept it.
On the other hand, other people may have different view toward the hardships. They are people who will give all of their efforts to get out from those difficult situations. Consider an example, where other employee is also working in the same bank that gives him a very low wages,and also has choice to quit from his current job. But, he is willing to take risks and is not afraid of the possibility to be rejected by other firms. Because of his bravery in seeking new opportunities, he is finally recruited by a better company.
In conclusion, I prefer the latter opinion, because if we never try to get out from the bad circumstances, despite of the risks that we may face, we will never be in a better condition.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 10, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...cepting the bad situations. In life, many different moments will occur, including the bad o...
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Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
... his job, but never does it. The reason is because of his fear of getting a exacerbate sit...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...eason is because of his fear of getting a exacerbate situation, where the opportu...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...eason is because of his fear of getting a exacerbate situation, where the opportunity to not...
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Line 3, column 513, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...struggling to improve his condition, he choose to accept it. On the other hand, ot...
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Line 5, column 275, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'wage'?
Suggestion: wage
...the same bank that gives him a very low wages,and also has choice to quit from his cu...
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Line 5, column 280, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...ame bank that gives him a very low wages,and also has choice to quit from his curren...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1319.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79636363636 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76680679389 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527272727273 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4360017321 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9333333333 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223500598684 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754516707107 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383277012906 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136543425605 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04169031519 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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