Some people believe that students should take part in extracurricular clubs at school for total personality development, while others believe that it has detrimental effects on academic performance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
After-school organisations are created to enhance student’s skills and enrolment in these enables them to prepare for the upcoming future. Some people, nevertheless, are of the opinion that getting involved in extracurricular clubs brings out adverse impacts on student’s learning outcomes. From my point of view, moderate attendance at these co-curricular associations gives them total personality accomplishment.
On the one hand, students participating in after-school clubs tend to acquire remarkable improvement in soft skills. Since they have to balance the activities and academic work , they will gradually make progress on time-managing skill. Partaking in extracurricular also create valuable chances for graduates to meet, to interact and make friends, then promote social relationships. In addition, when involved in an organisation, their responsibility might be enhanced considerably as they have to make sure the work gets done so they have to set aside the time to do it. Apparently, attaining success when joining a club will, in turn, boost their confidence and the euphoria may stimulate them to dedicate more and more. Therefore, extracurricular helps to develop a well-rounded student in all respects, especially their characteristic.
On the other hand, this participation can be a burden to students as well, such as inability of finishing all assignments and concentrating on their studies performance since they chronically overschedule themselves. Some students in inadequate health state may witness their physical and mental wellness being undesirably affected by the huge workload. Their academic results will also be unfavourably influenced as they are psychologically stressed or even diagnosed with other serious mental illnesses.
Finally, in my opinion, whether learners should enroll in co-curricular associations or not, depends on moderation. For instance, if too much time goes on after-school activities, one will face detrimental effects mentioned above; but if too much time goes on academic study, one will lack of practical experience and soft skills that are the keys to a novel world.
In conclusion, getting involved in extracurricular organisations will bring out a variety of merits if students are capable of balancing their time on each proportion. Hence, students can gain experience, skills and broaden their minds when joining in co-curricular activities in moderation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, finally, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2085.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 358.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.82402234637 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.47467775861 2.80592935109 124% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59217877095 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2008379442 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.3125 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.75 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169688088763 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565379652556 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351468402739 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.095240884474 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507143085153 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.77 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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