Some people feel that it is always wrong to keep animals in captivity for instance in zoo. Other people say that there are benefits for the animals and for humans. Discuss both sides of this debate and give your personal view.
It is acclaimed by some people that captivating animals in zoo is immoral and should not be accepted, whereas others and I believe this action is beneficial to both the animals and humans. In this essay, I will shed light on both sides of the matter and support my opinion by some reasons bellow.
On the one hand, it is true that animal should be given freedom in wild habitats instead of being jailed in puny cages at zoos, as in these ares, animal can develop their instinctions naturally. For instance, immature lions which live in wild environment in Madagascar can learn to hunt by themselves in their early ages. Under the supervisor and training of the lions’ parents, they learn several survival skills such as seeking for predators, moving without sounds or fighting to protect their colony. In fact, animals can live a real life in wild habitats since it is where they belong to.
On the other hand, it is perfectly possible for many species of animals living in zoos or wildlife parks to have a quality of life as high as, or even higher than in the wild. This is due to the fact that animals living in zoos not only are provided with nutritious and high-quality diets, but also are taken care thoroughly when they are suffering from illness. Moreover, the threat of animals died in the jaw of predators as well as social ostracism between them will be limited, which contributed to greater life expectancy of animals. In addition, when animals are captivated, it will be much more easier to conduct researches about numerous aspects of them, thereby humans can both gain more knowledge and come up with solutions to aid these still in the wild. To illustrate, studies on the oestrus cycle of an animals or its breeding rates help scientists figure out ways to manage animals’ wild population.
Ultimately, although it is much more enjoyable for animals to live in the wild, the long term benefits of living in the zoos or wildlife parks is undeniable. In my opinion, I deem that humans ought to take the initiative in renovating and improving the quality of captivating areas so that animals can enjoy their life in safety.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 597, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...animals are captivated, it will be much more easier to conduct researches about numerous as...
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Line 3, column 813, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an animal' or simply 'animals'?
Suggestion: an animal; animals
...strate, studies on the oestrus cycle of an animals or its breeding rates help scientists f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, still, well, whereas, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, as well as, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75335120643 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55722199122 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560321715818 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.3690810878 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.384615385 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6923076923 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6923076923 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262164590447 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961158206681 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617498269965 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174734675678 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574124868459 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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