Some people prefer to help or support directly in the local community for people who need it, however, others prefer to give money to the nations or international charities, discuss both sides and give your opinion
National or International charities are the choices of some individuals when they want to help prevalent people by their money. Nonetheless, others notify that it is more practical to directly give money to the people who need it, personally, I endorse this idea as it could make sure that the whole amount of money is received by these people
On the one hand, many people would like to give their money to the internal or external charities because of its popularity. Specifically, because these organisations usually concentrate on their advertising campaign as well as marketing strategies. Consequently, more people would know about these charities and be more trustful to donate their money. For example, an individual coming across a charity’s advertising on television, may posibilly be persuaded by the excellent activities of their charity and give out his money .Therefore those charities can attract a lot of people
On the other hand, other individuals suppose to give their money directly in the local community since it is safer. Simply, they want to give their money to the people who are truly need it and ensure that the money could be taken by them. Because they can not know how those charities would do with their money, as a result, this is the optimal way to support prevalent people. For example, instead of registering to give money to a charity organisation, people could give it to the people who are homeless, sleeping on the street.
To conclude, this a controversial topic since each sides has its own point of view. However, in my opinion, I prefer to directly support the poor people I see instead of sending it to an organisation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, therefore, well, for example, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1391.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96785714286 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85730133489 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503571428571 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.2789680047 49.4020404114 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.1 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.6 7.06120827912 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432760111637 0.244688304435 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173026060848 0.084324248473 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109401146834 0.0667982634062 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267291256195 0.151304729494 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0835119025904 0.056905535591 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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