Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In recent years, there is growing consideration in terms of public health. According to many people, increasing the number of sports facilities is the best solution to this issue. Yet, there still some arguments that there are better alternatives rather than investing on sports facilities. Overall, such idea has raised different arguments among people of concern.
People in favor of this argue that sports facilities has greatly revolutionised the modern lifestyle, particularly sedentary life which adversely impacts on the majority of people’s health. It is an indisputable fact that sports ...
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Sentence: People in favor of this argue that sports facilities has greatly revolutionised the modern lifestyle, particularly sedentary life which adversely impacts on the majority of people's health.
Error: revolutionised Suggestion: revolutionized
Sentence: It is an indisputable fact that sports equipment namely gymnastics, swimming pools, parks not only allows people to do exercises regularly but also exposes peole more to nature.
Error: peole Suggestion: people
Sentence: Take the case of parks as a salient example, many people are able to take a walk in the morning in accordance with enjoying the greenity and fresh atmostphere.
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Sentence: By way of conclusion, increasing the number of sports facilities alone can not lead to succsess in improving public health.
Error: succsess Suggestion: success
Sentence: In my personal view, the coexistence of equipped sports facilities and awareness of healthy lifestyle should be harnessed to make these benefits more achivable.
Error: achivable Suggestion: achievable
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