Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities, Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Community health is a topic that not only society but also the government care about. There are two mains thinking way about improving the public health. One thinks that increasing the number of sports facilities be effective while the other one thinks there are many impactions more important than it. In this essay, I will look at these two ideas and give my opinion about it.
Let's look at the first hand, the increase in the number of sports facilities would help the people have more condition to approach to exercise. In the outskirt these days, unlike the urban with many gyms and training grounds, the locals are lack of sports equipment and grounds. Even if there are a gym or a basket field, they would be too far for many so that the people can't train regularly. In addition, there are many sports apart from common ones like football, basketball, etc that lots of people want to play which raising the number of facilities would adapt to these types of sports players.
On the other hand, it can't be denied that other measurements sometimes more effective. Example, communication plays an important role in raising people awareness about the benefit of playing sports can get risk of many illness and disease. In addition, building a better living environment is extremely needed for people when it not only increase the lifespan of the citizen but also bringing them with a more quality life.
In conclusion, providing more sports facilities is a good way to improve public health but I think we have to depend on the condition, situation of an area to choose which are the best actions for increasing the society health standard.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, while, apart from, i think, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1364.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81978798587 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48210516674 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551236749117 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
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Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3389472039 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.666666667 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264515211873 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0973014924524 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638428405134 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163091202999 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548878387416 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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