Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together Do you agree or disagree

Music can help us to indulge ourselves far from any anxiety or difficulties in today’s highly pressurized life burring people unfortunately. However, the importance of it does not only contribute to individuals, but also is for all of human beings on the world that can unite enthusiastically without any tensions.

At the first hand, music can gather people with different cultures, creeds, opinions and religious, reducing conflicts and tensions among them. Also, it can help people to become familiar with different cultures that can be satisfying for the most people. Furthermore, it is obvious that in recent years music composers and lyricists try to cooperate with each other in order to compose more universal pieces of music absorbing attentions from different countries. For example, we can see that signers and musicians from different countries have cooperated with each other in order to increase their benefits beside helping for globalization of their work, making more solidarity among people.

On the second hand, thinking about uniting different generations by means of music is a simplistic view because having different age groups in a concert hall listened to the same piece of music is impossible. It means that younger generations specially teenagers love listing to pop music or rap song, while older people prefer listening to classical music that have more meaningful contend, ranging from patriotic subjects to true love instead. Interestingly, both groups find other’s taste of music bothering and unbearable, but they should try to have mutual respects for each other’s music choice.

To conclude, there is no reason why music can not be the reason of uniting people’s of different cultures, and to having different generations beside each other by music seemed unimaginable.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...ach other by music seemed unimaginable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, thus, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1541.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44522968198 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90221976192 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579505300353 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.0076915492 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.1 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191194703475 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890330246839 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502058811801 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126213956174 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389409596242 0.056905535591 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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