Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Music issaid to have the power that can connect people, regardless their backgrounds,religions or ages. I completely agree with this view, and will give my reasonsbelow. Musiccan certainly reach across cultural and national boundaries, bringing people from allaround the world together. Back to the 1980s, a worldwide rock concerts namedLive Aid had been opened by prince Charles and princess Diana in London. Theconcert’s objective was to raise funds for famine relief in Ethiopia. Two live events were heldsimultaneously in the UK and the US, and they had raised $127 million. The concerts were a huge success,both in terms of the number of people around the world who watched them andtheir impact on international public awareness of the famine. Theydemonstrated, and many people believe, that music truly is the planet’s globallanguage. Furthermore, music also has the ability toconnect people from different generations. Regardless of age, we can all enjoya memorable melody, a strong rhythm or a beautiful singing voice, and the bestsongs seem to make us have the same feeling and thought. This would explainwhy televised music competitions, such as ‘The X Factor’ or ‘The Voice’, aresuch popular prime-time shows. These programmes attract incredibly broadaudiences because singing and popular songs appeal to children, parents andgrandparents alike. I believe that no other form of entertainment can bringfamilies together in this way. In conclusion, I believe that music is uniquein its own. It creates shared experiences between people, irrespective ofculture and age.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , religions
...ect people, regardless their backgrounds,religions or ages. I completely agree with this v...
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Line 1, column 324, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'concert'?
Suggestion: concert
...er. Back to the 1980s, a worldwide rock concerts namedLive Aid had been opened by prince...
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Line 1, column 610, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , both
...illion. The concerts were a huge success,both in terms of the number of people around...
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Line 1, column 1441, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... can bringfamilies together in this way. In conclusion, I believe that music is u...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, as to, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1363.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 234.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.82478632479 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.9601736555 2.80592935109 141% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.717948717949 0.561755894193 128% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8837324877 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.583333333 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212313528201 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582124172699 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671962705339 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212313528201 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.48 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , religions
...ect people, regardless their backgrounds,religions or ages. I completely agree with this v...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 324, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'concert'?
Suggestion: concert
...er. Back to the 1980s, a worldwide rock concerts namedLive Aid had been opened by prince...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 610, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , both
...illion. The concerts were a huge success,both in terms of the number of people around...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 1441, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... can bringfamilies together in this way. In conclusion, I believe that music is u...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, as to, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1363.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 234.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.82478632479 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.9601736555 2.80592935109 141% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.717948717949 0.561755894193 128% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8837324877 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.583333333 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212313528201 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582124172699 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671962705339 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212313528201 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.48 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.