It is argued that it is crucial for the government to reduce environmental contamination and address housing issues to improve public health. While such measures can deter some diseases among urban citizens, not all, I still believe that healthy lifestyles and rich nutrition would be more feasible ways to prevent illnesses and diseases.
Mitigating problems related to the environment and housing can undoubtedly improve public health. In reality, air pollution is a major reason for several respiratory diseases such as asthma and lung cancer, particularly in densely populated urban areas. Therefore, implementing strict regulations and promoting cleaner energy sources can mitigate air pollution levels, ultimately preventing such diseases and improving citizens’ health. Similarly, inadequate housing conditions, including overcrowding and poor sanitation, create a breeding environment for infectious diseases. As a result, ensuring affordable, safe and hygienic housing can lower communicable disease risk and boost overall well-being.
However, illness and diseases can stem from various factors, mainly poor nutrition and inactive lifestyles, and not solely from such issues. Chief of these is sedentary lifestyles among individuals. These days, many young people are more likely to engage in computer-screen activities, such as video games, online conversation rather than physical activities, making them more susceptible to obesity and vision problems. Moreover, according to the medical report, poor nutrition contributes to stress, fatigue, and inability to work. It even promotes the risk of developing some illnesses and other health problems such as high blood pressure, heart disease and stroke, depression. Therefore, encouraging regular physical activity and educating individuals about balanced diets can have a significant impact on disease prevention.
In conclusion, although addressing issues involving the environment and housing can prevent diseases related to these problems such as asthma and respiratory aliments, I still contend that promoting active lifestyles and raising awareness about a balanced diet and reasonable nutrition would be more effective measures to improve public health. Additionally, I am convinced there will be less sickness and aliments once these measures are implemented.
- The bar chart below shows the amount of money invested in each category from 5 organizations Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 67
- The table gives information about five types of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010 2012 and 2014 78
- The maps show the changes of an office building between the present and the future Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 56
- Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes To what extent do you agree or disagree 89
- Some people believe that schools are no longer necessary because students can get so much information through the Internet and study just as well at home To what extent do you agree or disagree 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 454, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ts once these measures are implemented.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, similarly, so, still, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 6.10271903323 5.12529762239 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0387913822 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601208459215 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.2648685779 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.666666667 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0666666667 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19276346985 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061988725485 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439390511078 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126027883039 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412715741751 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.77 50.2224549098 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.1 12.4159519038 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.45 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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