Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of works and school should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects. To what extent do you agree?
In recent years, lack of practical knowledge has been an unresolved issue for education systems. Many people believe that children should be allowed to apply for part-time jobs along with studying intellectual subjects. There are many different views, but I am in favor of combining learning and practice.
To begin with, part- time job is a good preparation for future career. Practically, a great number of graduated students without realistic knowledge have to take a long time to adapt to work environment. Thus, by approaching hands-on jobs, teenagers will be more likely to understand essential skills. For example, a student tutor can have a chance to practice to become a teacher in the future, students working as sale assistants not only know how to interact with customers but also learn the method of managing. Actually, a large number of students usually spend their parents ‘money, so they hardly know its value. It is not until they have to try their best to earn money that they will sure how literally difficult it is.
Finally yet importantly, doing a part-time job will improve student’s life. For instance, many youngsters live in slums are allowed to take part-time jobs, which reduce the number of crimes significantly. In addition, statistics suggest that if students only concentrate on learning academic knowledge, they will more likely to suffer from autism. Therefore, no sooner do they find a job than their health will improve.
In conclusion, learning and practice play important roles because they bring many positive effects for children in the future such as practical experience, better health and so on.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24812030075 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82616766989 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.646616541353 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5505360009 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7142857143 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128248763214 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0439952721474 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408150921279 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0715886507726 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310042831846 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.