Some people think that big companies should provide sports and social facilities for the local community. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Playing sport and taking part in social activities can both improve our physical as well as our mental health. Therefore, there is some thinking that big companies, including both public and private, should build sports and social facilities for the local communities. Personally, I would agree that carrying out these can improve communal relationships and shower the companies in a positive light.
Firstly, it is clear that many citizens couldn’t have their relaxing time to spend with their on another due to their professional and familial works. Having these kinds of building for entertainment uses, they can get appropriate time to participate in daily activities that they would have missed. Take Hanoi as an example, most parks here are built up by large companies like Ecopark and Vinaconex, and the quality of life here is very healthy. Most of the local denizens are able to have their conversations, forge new relationships and some take their morning exercises here.
Moreover, companies can create a bright image by providing community services. They build parks and sports stations for the community, so the credits and the positive feedbacks are given back to the companies by the locals, and most of the time, the departments would gain fame and respect because they have done their responsibilities to the people. For instance, a manufacturer in New York which provided the budget for sports centers in different towns across the state and created more chances for citizens to take part in community-based sports was getting more appreciation and got their products purchased at a higher rate.
In conclusion, both the companies and the citizens are benefited as the people get healthier lifestyles and the bright sides of the manufacturers are more remarkable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 82, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...ctivities can both improve our physical as well as our mental health. Therefore, there is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27622377622 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90178825545 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573426573427 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.622760931 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.181818182 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.18181818182 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231050221416 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088626709406 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0880076787152 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134544035909 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084043001573 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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