Some people think that children need to study in an environment where they have to compete with each other. Others, however, believe that teamwork is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion
It is argue that whether schoolchidren should study in the highly competitive environment. While many individuals believe that competing with others would benefit children in many circumstances, I would argue that cooperative environment is better for chidren themselves.
On the one hand, there are various reasons why teenagers should learn in the competitive classroom. Firstly, thanks to this environment, children could be encouraged to make great strides in their study so as to become the high achievers. As a result, some top classmates would be recognized and given to specialised classes to nurture their academic ability. In my high school, for example, students often take examination during the term to classify those gifted students and give them to the extra classes to take national competitions. Secondly, the competitive environment could expose children to the real world, where they have to compete with others. If, for instance, youngsters are taught to compete, then they will have a wealth of experience and easily find a job in the intensely competitive society.
On the other hand, I strongly agree with those people who believe that collaborative learning could result in more favourable outcomes. The first reason is that teamwork spirit is of paramount importance for schoolchildren in the classroom context because it allows them to make the most of each member strengths and minimize weaknesses. Consequently, productivity could be promoted and individual student would identify and overcome their own weaknesses. Furthermore, cooperative environment could foster social solidarity, which is vitally important for student future career seeing that each team project in company would always be assigned in group instead of just one member.
In conclusion, it seems to me that collaboration between students brings more benefits, although competitive environment also stand students in good stead to some extent.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'argued'.
Suggestion: argued
It is argue that whether schoolchidren should study...
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Line 3, column 204, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ed to make great strides in their study so as to become the high achievers. As a result,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61694915254 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04671282918 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613559322034 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9959791585 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.461538462 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8461538462 7.06120827912 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193656816698 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670559440469 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708307162933 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110446667025 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296311630486 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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