Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere To what extent do you agree with this view

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Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere.
To what extent do you agree with this view?

Submitted by Gulmiraa on Thu, 08/11/2022 - 03:03

It is often argued that the government's financial support for art is a wastage of financial resources that can be invested to improve other useful sources.I am completely against this notion and I think allocating funds on art is vital because of its major role in passing the traditions to young generations and being lucrative.
Firstly, art is an eminent way to express someone's opinion regarding the issue and artists have tendency to reflect their society's culture, traditions and heritage in their artistic works and projects. Hence, it would be the best way to pass the legacy of society to the next generations.Moreover , arts can provide us with valuable information about the lifestyle of our ancestors and their mental approach. When people visit ancient places , for example, they can easily image the lifestyles of ancient people by seeing figurative arts made by them.
Secondly, supporting art financially can result in turn economic growth of a country. By this I mean , Providing the fact that some pieces of an art become famuos all over the world, then it would attract more tourists, stimulate business activity and expand workforce of this country. Furthermore, having a good economic condition means automatically fulfilling almost all basic needs of its citizens. However, unless government supports these artists with sufficient funds, this may affect their confidence which would result in lessing of their skills.
In conclusion, government should invest in the art in order to keep the trace of our culture for upcoming generations and facilitate the artists to improve their skills.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1357.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30078125 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88300928202 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6328125 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.4236310768 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.777777778 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4444444444 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.2222222222 7.06120827912 230% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169583373108 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066028320519 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450118005382 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0991236479695 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037215389729 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.7795591182 167% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 156, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...nvested to improve other useful sources.I am completely against this notion and...
^
Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ted to improve other useful sources.I am completely against this notion and I th...
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Line 1, column 180, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... useful sources.I am completely against this notion and I think allocating funds...
^^
Line 2, column 43, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'someones'' or 'someone's'?
Suggestion: someones'; someone's
...rstly, art is an eminent way to express someones opinion regarding the issue and artists...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 288, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Moreover
...gacy of society to the next generations.Moreover , arts can provide us with valuable inf...
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Line 2, column 296, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...society to the next generations.Moreover , arts can provide us with valuable infor...
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Line 2, column 441, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...proach. When people visit ancient places , for example, they can easily image the ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...y seeing figurative arts made by them. Secondly, supporting art financially can...
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Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: ,
...omic growth of a country. By this I mean , Providing the fact that some pieces of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, for example, i mean, i think, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1357.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30078125 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88300928202 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6328125 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.4236310768 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.777777778 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4444444444 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.2222222222 7.06120827912 230% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169583373108 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066028320519 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450118005382 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0991236479695 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037215389729 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.7795591182 167% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.