The expenditure on artists and art creations these days are often the subject of many public debates and controversies. Some people believe that instead of wasting money on arts, the government should be accountable for allocating its fund to the other sectors in societies.
Personally, I don’t agree this idea due to the art benefits bringing to our society.
One the one hand, the art plays an important role in the development of the country, acquiring a huge reputation among people. One of the primary causes is that arts arouse our national interest and it seems to be of a paramount of importance which leads to enriching our culture as well as fostering and developing creativity. Moreover, many students nowadays are overwhelmed by the heavy workload on subjects at school and other extracurricular activities, arts give them an opportunity to blow off some steam and recharge their batteries after a long period time at school. Therefore, the state should take responsibility for preserving and developing arts by opening more and more art galleries, organizing exhibitions and cultural programs. It is essential for the government to provide financial support for organizations to preserve and develop arts.
On the other hand, there are some drawbacks if the national state ignores spending the amount of money on other sectors like education, economy especially healthcare. Large sections of communities especially the underprivileged are deprived of basis health facilities such as vaccines and preventive health checkups, leading to increasing a great number of people getting ill. Moreover, if the government had diverted some of funds invested on arts to other sectors like education, it would have had a strong younger generation due to the fact that students could be learned in the best schooling environments with modern technologies as well as the most valuable lessons from professional teachers.
In the conclusion, the government should be accountable for distributing its funds to all sectors including arts because each sector has its own contribution towards the development of the country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 418, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the funds') or simply say ''some funds''.
Suggestion: some of the funds; some funds
...oreover, if the government had diverted some of funds invested on arts to other sectors like ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39039039039 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09739634765 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582582582583 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.7992834354 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.583333333 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.75 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189402714005 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667551275219 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517708518851 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1113457162 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413060306226 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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