Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Other believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People nowadays have two different view that government should give financial aid for creative naturalists, painters and musicians for example to support as well as encourage them keep doing artistic things. In other word, some believe that creative artists should be funded by other alternative sources.
Firstly, do artists really need financial support from the state to accomplish their art projects? In my opinion, they definitely require help from possibility supporters and institution for the artistic projects. In UK, there are a ton of publicized works in spaces like street or square in city center. There are several sculptural statues are along the street in Liverpool and these statues has been redeveloped recently and as a result, it costs thousands of dollar each statue. So that is the reason people believe government should give them financial aid to continue their projects because without their funding, our cities would be less interesting and also lack of attractive.
On the other hand, government have more important concerns need to be solve as soon as possible than the payment for creative naturalists. Over population and global warming for instant. If they focus on the art projects, some detrimental things going to happen in the long run and the money need to pay for creative artist is not a small number. And instead of paying for artists, it is more helpful if they pay that aid for schooling and support some poor families. That is why other people believe that alternative sources should give financial support for artists rather than government.
In conclusion, believe that it can be both good if one of two support institutions cited above give aid for creative naturalists.

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Message: Comparison is written "as possible 'as'".
Suggestion: as
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, really, so, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1444.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17562724014 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69975997015 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569892473118 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1102706445 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.076923077 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4615384615 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92307692308 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404335719171 0.244688304435 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150335460401 0.084324248473 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142905835663 0.0667982634062 214% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27721901227 0.151304729494 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137715056153 0.056905535591 242% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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