Some people think that a huge a mount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals and that this money could be better spent on the human population To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Some people think that a huge a mount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There are many arguments around the question whether people should spend a huge amount of money on protecting wild animals or use expenditure on the survival of humankind. In my perspective, people should keep balance the resources allocated for human and other species.

On the one hand, money and effort should be spent on welfare of human. Firstly, there are still various problems which need to be solve in this society. Many undeveloped countries possess high-rate of homelessness and poverty. Many lives are facing death because of starvation. As a results, the government should focus on raising funds to help poor people to overcome the situation rather than pay attention on wild animals. Secondly, animals living in wild are one of the culprits of food loss in farms. They eat crops, destroy many farms, which reduce the quality and quantity of agricultural products. Therefore, spending money to protect wild species is sometime unnecessary.

On the other hand, people also need to make bug effort to protect wild life. One of the reason is that protecting other animals will help humankind preserve rare gene resources, which benefit people in many aspects. By researching and experiments, scientists could create ne vaccine on medicine to cure many patients thanks to these genes. Another reason why people should use expenditure on wild animal is to preserve biodiversity. Some of the animals are essential for human well-being. If they do not exist on earth in the future, the survival of human can be threatened. For example, if bees disappear, people can only survive for about 3 years according to researches.

In conclusion, people should consider carefully about the quantity of money and time invested in society and wildlife.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 33, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
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Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
... facing death because of starvation. As a results, the government should focus on raising...
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Line 5, column 434, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...ild animal is to preserve biodiversity. Some of the animals are essential for human well-be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 6.0 24.0651302605 25% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1476.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21554770318 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7390607004 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575971731449 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.4085484157 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7222222222 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229152618703 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691292356258 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554024079573 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137572888626 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246688477164 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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