Some people think that it is fine for professional sportsmen and sportswomen to misbehave on or off the field, as long as they are playing well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is a view that there is no problem even if professional sports players’ behavior is unfavorable as long as their play in their field is excellent. I completely disagree with this statement.
The main reason why I disagree with the opinion that athletes’ behavior does not matter as long as their play is fantastic is that professional sports players should be an excellent role model for the general public. Their great achievements in their fields are appealing to many people because people can learn from their success stories easily that their hard working and self-control make them successful. It provides fans with a great hope that individuals can also success in their lives and encourages them to work hard on their jobs or study. Therefore, sports players’ misbehaviors disappoint their fans significantly because people feel as if they were told a lie by the athletes. Several years ago, an enthusiastic fans of a Japanese professional baseball player Shinnoske Abe committed a suicide after she knew the news of Abe’s love affair.
Another reason is that their unfavorable behavior can have a negative financial impact. Many companies offer popular sportsmen and sportswomen a financial support on because their popularity and success in sports can give a good impression to customers by utilizing them on their advertisements. This can encourage consumers to buy their products. However, their misbehavior can damage the image of the sponsors considerably, making companies lose an enormous profit. A Japanese professional football player Maezono is a good example of this. After the report of his assault to a taxi driver, his supporting companies, including ASSICS and Nike experienced a significant decrease in sportswear and shoes sales.
In conclusion, although some may argue that sports players’ misbehaviors have no problems if they play well, I believe that it cannot be allowed because it can hurt many people and damage sponsors’ profit.
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- Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects Other people think that in today s world subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 78
- Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people Discuss the advantages and disadvantages 61
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
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Line 2, column 725, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'fan'?
Suggestion: fan
...tes. Several years ago, an enthusiastic fans of a Japanese professional baseball pla...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34504792332 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99949469558 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562300319489 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4211568366 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.5 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3571428571 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1223280671 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456478640383 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448551002136 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0954666211783 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395024828387 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.