Art and music have a greater contribution to society than science and math.
Do you agree or disagree?
There is a view that art and music contribute to human society more than science and math. Although the former is important in people’s life, I disagree with this statement for the following reasons.
The main reason why I oppose to the opinion that art and music are more instrumental than science and math is that they do not provide vital services for human life. This means people cannot obtain necessities, such as food and accommodation through art and music. They are often considered to be an entertainment in modern society, which offer enjoyment and happiness for individuals. Although these factors are playing an important role in life, art and music are less significant than science and math because people can live without them.
In contrast, science and math have a much more considerable contribution to society compare to art and music. This is because they produce a wide variety of essential items for human life. For example, science enables human beings to obtain sustenance steadily, while math is indispensable for car navigation, reducing traffic congestion and securing drivers’ convenience and safety. Moreover, science and math are contributing to maintaining and improving people’s health by revealing the mechanism of the function of human organs and developing various medication. If there were not science and math, people could not live a comfortable life.
To sum up, although art and music contribute to individuals’ life to some extent because it helps people mentally, I believe that they are far less important than science and math which are providing crucial services, enriching human life.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, while, for example, in contrast, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1383.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29885057471 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86291257372 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540229885057 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1918541421 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.25 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34269554015 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154522925446 0.084324248473 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13763800881 0.0667982634062 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242699155837 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484967052514 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, while, for example, in contrast, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1383.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29885057471 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86291257372 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540229885057 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1918541421 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.25 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34269554015 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154522925446 0.084324248473 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13763800881 0.0667982634062 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242699155837 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484967052514 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.