Some people think it is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment for people who are already ill To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some people argue that spending public fund on encouraging a healthy lifestyle tp avoid sickness is more crucial than spending it on treating people who are already sick. In my opinion, i completely agree with this idea for the following reason.

To begin with, unhealthy lifestyle is considered as a main cause of fatal diseaces. For example, people who have the smoking habit are more likely to get lung cancer than those who do not smoke. Hence, government's budget spending on education people about how to lead a healthy lifestyle may bring some advantages to the society. Throughout the educational programs on televisions, social media, people would gain the awareness about protecting their health. For instance, people who read or watch news on social media about health may stop eating jungk food and change to eat organic food instead.

Additionally, it's cannot be deny that prevention is better than cure. Firstly, motivating citizens to adopt a positive lifestyle is more cost-effective, compared to treating patients. For example, a promotion project which may prevent numerous people from getting sick is probably less expensive than caring for several sick person who required sophisticated treatment such as radiotherapy or surgery. This will help people reduce the financial hardships.

In conclusion, promoting a healthy lifestyle is more preferable to treating patients. Not only improving physical health to avoid sickness, but also the financial advantages. Therefore, i highly recommend that more funding should go to encouraging a heathier way of life instead of caring for patients.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1365.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43824701195 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86045788815 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.641434262948 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2352498102 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9285714286 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78571428571 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351068902091 0.244688304435 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105659569054 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906834471862 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211695009572 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0882061423097 0.056905535591 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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