Some people think that the main factors influencing a child’s development these days are things such as tv, friends and music. Others believe that family still remains very important.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

While parents play an important role during their child's development, some people believe that some external factors influence the children to a larger extent. This essay will examine both sides of the argument.

There are indeed factors external to the family that affect a child's behaviour during their development such as the internet, television and friends. These days, children are provided with more access to the internet. With just one click, they can see everything that is happening around them, whether it is good or bad. Moreover, they try to imitate their friends whom they admire the most. It might sometimes be a positive impact, but it could also be negative such as taking drugs and smoking.

Ultimately, it is, however, the family who have the most important impact. This is because, children spend most of the time with their family members during their development. They develop social skills, confidence, moral values through their itercation with them. For example, children from dysfunctional home often face problems, whilst children from a warm and loving environment seem to be very calm most of the time.

To conclude, the family has a major role during the growth of a child. Although external factors seem to impact the child's behaviour, it is, however, the family which plays a vital role in moulding the child's behaviour.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, moreover, so, while, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1142.0 1615.20841683 71% => OK
No of words: 221.0 315.596192385 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16742081448 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51886272702 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.619909502262 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 342.9 506.74238477 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5228306647 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8461538462 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.69230769231 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152827272589 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545006381944 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487956904145 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102537151083 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425169149224 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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