Some people think that in this modern world, getting old is entirely bad. However, other people believe that the life of old people is much better now than it was in the past.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In several people's viewpoint, today's improvement enhances the life of aging people, while other believe that this contributes negative impacts to them. There are reasonable points of debates on both sides which will be elucidated more below.
On the one hand, opponents of age-related issues in contemporary era argue that elderly's life is well supported by government through pension funds. Apparently, the financial incentive programs would be main income for retiree to fulfill basic necessities, so that, those earning for their own life is worth to claim social security. Moreover, the presence of up-to-date medical facilities maintains health-related problems encountered by oldsters. The fact that, with advanced facilities, a number of doctors competently diagnose certain diseases. In line with effective treatments, to be medicated and prevented as fast as possible result in the increase of life expectancy.
On the other hand, though, proponents of this view say that oldsters would face significant problems of competitive job. Regarding competing with young generations, if old people lack of prominent skills (creative and inovative thinking; and decision-making), they will draw pension earlier. In addition, the lower physical endurance shows difficultiies to deal with high-tech devices. The tendency of negative effects spending hours on screens might lead elderlies to inflict worse health condition. Consequently, an increased risk of weak resistance hinders them from the enjoyment of lifespan.
In summary, it seems to me that the increasing number of people's age may induce several drawbacks; great challange of competitive job and vulnerable body resistance. This is as long as well supported pension funds should greatly be considered by both individual and government. (267 words)
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
In several peoples viewpoint, todays improvement enhances ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 238, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...d be main income for retiree to fulfill basic necessities, so that, those earning for their own l...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, consequently, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, well, while, in addition, in summary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.72118959108 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06352183646 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.706319702602 0.561755894193 126% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.180685872 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.928571429 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2142857143 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138409664431 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0368189118495 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045937235876 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0864565233111 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394054697036 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.45 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
In several peoples viewpoint, todays improvement enhances ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 238, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...d be main income for retiree to fulfill basic necessities, so that, those earning for their own l...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, consequently, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, well, while, in addition, in summary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.72118959108 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06352183646 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.706319702602 0.561755894193 126% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.180685872 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.928571429 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2142857143 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138409664431 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0368189118495 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045937235876 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0864565233111 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394054697036 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.45 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.