Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent
on each other, while others think that people have become
independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is sometimes argued that modernisation is the drag on the dependency, so people are becoming more and more independent in these days. While others hold the conservative view towards this vice versa. In this essay I shall put forth both sides of an argument.
On the one hand, it is inevitable that economic pressures,high expenditures and downturns are the cumulative aspect which serve as a catalyst for stimulating the reliance of the people to each other. As the more cost of the living is proliferating and the more people are turning into encircled with heavy burdens,they are arr becoming incompatible enough to combat this issues themselves,so , in order to accomplish these daunting tasks they are being reliant on each other more than ever before. Admittedly,people are too ambitious in todays, therefore, they are quite enslaved themselves at an increasing level in case achieving their goals.
On the other hand,somr opine that this economic pressure itself perhaps might turn into present opposite result towards the statement that mentioned above. For example, nowadays close knit families are disappearing in the face of this economic pressure and it's members are choosing independent lifestyle. Because, parents are working in scrupulous routine and have no enough time to spend with their families,thereby, bonds are abating,families are dispersing and householders are becoming obliged to live alone. Apart from that, advancement of technology would be third factor, as it is opening window of opportunities to people like self studying through Internet or working in remote places.
In conclusion, while modernisation impulsing the reliance, I believe that mostly, it removed the obstacles from independency. Therefore,today people are less reliant on each other.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, third, while, apart from, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20805048304 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625454545455 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.270752684 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.5 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9166666667 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247778980417 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879251375316 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642885135989 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155595112758 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504061558699 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.