Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is waste of valuable money.What is your opinion?

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Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is waste of valuable money.

What is your opinion?

it is humans responsibility to protect flora and fauna. Some people believe that crowd should spend extensively for protect those animals which are in danger ,while others think that it is wasteful thing. This essay will discuss as to why more money should be spent on it.

On the one hand , those who believed that it is squander of money for numerious reasons. First of all, a huge amount of money on industrial sectors should be spent by the government who will give job opportunity to youngsters,rather than on endangered animals. because it is necessary for government bodies to focus on industrial development rather than spending money on those species which are in threat by which , plenty of capital could be consumed . For instance , China recently spend one third of its GDP on protecting them due to that ,at present there is the time of recession.

On the other hand,it is crucial to nation for several reasons. Firstly,as they are salient factor in country's development, government has to spend money to protect them. because it is best way to bring back touristers from worldwide to watch them at cages where they are kept. If more visitors come, they will enhance the income sources for government.

To conclude, despite the waste of money of protecting animals which are at edge of extinction . I believed that it is prominent for nation to progress economically.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, so, third, while, as to, for instance, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1168.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 232.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03448275862 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78773021689 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586206896552 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 354.6 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.254652067 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8461538462 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8461538462 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288340581047 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0951769206015 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847763315567 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184562013988 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11990177478 0.056905535591 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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