Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
It is supposed that museum should become entertaining venues to capture’s young people attention and relax; others, however, hold the view that the major purpose of museums is solely to give understandings to people. While I am in favor of the latter view, I am going to delve into both views in this essay.
There are several reasons why many people believe that museums should be altered its purpose in order to become an amusing venues for the young. They may assert that their proposal can influence significantly to the long-standing prejudice of every people for museums, which is known for its solemnity and silence. Therefore, learning history through visiting to museums with a pleasant atmosphere could help the young passion with this field and enhance the knowledge of young people in national history effectively. For example, in the US, has proceeded to legislate museums for becoming a venue for studying and entertaining as opposed to being extremely solemn before. The result is that every people in their nation mostly obtains a excellent understanding about history and will develop more in the future.
In spite of arguments, I believe that museums remaining its main target regardless of other opinions. From my point of view, museums have the target to accommodate valuable and historical remains in the past and if it is permitted to be more opened with people, it would be a warning threat in conserving those remains. Therefore, remaining the purpose simultaneously contributes to the preservation of those ancient remains and kept safe in the upcoming future. For example, Vietnam, which is renowned for its proud and diverse history, consistently protects museums effectively by restricting people visit here to entertain and only permits those who travel here to study. As a result, every museum rarely occur any robberies about remains in museums as well.
In conclusion, although it might be sensible for letting the young to entertain, I personally prefer the current system which keeps it solemn and serves for studying only.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'venue'?
Suggestion: venue
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Line 2, column 736, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...y people in their nation mostly obtains a excellent understanding about history a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2012012012 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79131350276 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561561561562 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.7164637486 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.230769231 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6153846154 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289804286121 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10792055293 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069561926296 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175424218621 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0876050690106 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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