Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate. Which do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
The purpose of schools is perceived to be more entertaining by some, but others believe that educating children is the one and only job for it. In my belief, schools should be versatile in its approach, in which both the entertainment and education shall have their respective share.
Entertainment is the only factor that tends to attract certain age groups to schools. Given the level of maturity, elementary school children do not analyse importance of education or accept school routine when it is of monotonous in schedule. This is the reason for incorporating certain amount of entertaining activities, be it music or dance or roleplay, as distractions to make school sessions little more joyous. For instance, Japan made it mandatory for all their kindergarten schools to play cartoon shows inbetween periods to attract children to come to school every day.
At the same time, the distractions must possess some degree of educational value. Distractions, here, do not serve to take off children’s mind altogether from studies but just to prevent their boredom during school hours. In other words, students can be engaged with extracurriculars containing applied knowledge of syllabus. For exampl, if children were allowed to do roleplays of Shakespeare drama from their English literature, they would feel the burden of education a little light and tend to remember the novel ever after.
Arguments of whether school being more entertaining or strictly sticking to educating is broken down by the illustration of the school’s purpose by Japan.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rpose of schools is perceived to be more entertaining by some, but others believe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, for instance, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1321.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 247.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34817813765 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07833975484 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.631578947368 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.581126021 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.090909091 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4545454545 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20645115485 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816368613541 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446391782864 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13646328465 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307875129043 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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