Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Submitted by Bui Quang on Tue, 10/08/2019 - 11:37

Is is true that the question of whether to reward students with an excellent academic result or those show improvements in academic result remain a source of controversy in education fields. White a number of people believe that only student who achieving the highest grade deserve award. I would argue that students have many improvements should be encouraged instead of without any motivation for them.

On the one hand, there are a lot of variety of reasons to reward students who having excellent academic achievement in standard of most schools. Firstly, this could creat a highly competitive in order to appreciate students by objective aspect. Because most of students often have a desire to win award and always encourage them to obtain higher score beyond. Secondly, gift students are outstanding could give more opportunities to nurture their abilities. My high school, for instance, selects the students with an excellent results for extra classes to develop their capabilities in order to take them to national competitions.

One the other hand, one of the most important is encourage the students who make strides in their study results in more favourable outcomes. First benefit is that equally chances for every students receive awards, rather than only focus on the highest achievers. Instead of felling disappointed when competitive with their top classmate, students who are recognized their effort during semesters will fell motivate if they are rewarded for making significant progress. This lead to those approached knowledge of the world, not just to gain high scores. Thus,commonly phenomenons such as cheating in the exam, pressure, stressful would be reduce.

In conclusion, rewarding students with the highest scores is advantageous in some aspects. It seems to me that it is better to give reward the students who is improvement in the level of academic performances which is a motivation to develop in education of many modern countries.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: Is
Is is true that the question of whether to re...
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Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
Is is true that the question of whether to reward students with an excellent ac...
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Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to award'
Suggestion: to award
...who achieving the highest grade deserve award. I would argue that students have many ...
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Line 3, column 255, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the students') or simply say ''most students''.
Suggestion: most of the students; most students
...e students by objective aspect. Because most of students often have a desire to win award and a...
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Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...jective aspect. Because most of students often have a desire to win award and alw...
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Line 3, column 530, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'result'?
Suggestion: result
... selects the students with an excellent results for extra classes to develop their capa...
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Line 5, column 51, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'encouraged'.
Suggestion: encouraged
...ther hand, one of the most important is encourage the students who make strides in their ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , commonly
...orld, not just to gain high scores. Thus,commonly phenomenons such as cheating in the exa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33974358974 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88256159081 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576923076923 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7399323379 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.066666667 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297369718204 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.099648381032 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635954629088 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198452338444 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407598325342 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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