some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged.others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults

There are so many research about 'How we raiser our children' in the modern area. All of these studies show childhood is very important for rest of life. Children gain some sense from their parents.

One of these sense is competition. At the begining of story which tells developping of humanity, challenge is primary skill for survive.Human nature willing for victory all the time. Sense of competition is basic instinct of human kinds. Attaining competition sense in childhood is very useful. Competitive children have self-confident because they always ready for race. This makes them more successful in their life. They internalise challenging with problems. Children which have competitive aspect become more adequate person.

Co-operating is most significant behaviour for humanity. Working together help parents. For example; A child who helps mother for tiding his/her room is useful for parents. However children can effect badly. Sharing the workload is not suitable always. Unfamiliar people don't want to co-operate. The other bad result of co-operation is decreasing personal success. If a children expect help for a problem this makes him/her unsuccesfull.

In conclusion, co-operate is helpful but it is not enough for being succesfull person. There is competition eery stage of life. So children might be ready for it from the begining of their life.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun research seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much research', 'a good deal of research'.
Suggestion: much research; a good deal of research
There are so many research about How we raiser our children in the...
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Suggestion: Human
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ing his/her room is useful for parents. However children can effect badly. Sharing the ...
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
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Suggestion: don't
... not suitable always. Unfamiliar people dont want to co-operate. The other bad resul...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1160.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 213.0 315.596192385 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44600938967 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87669711248 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.633802816901 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 358.2 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 9.0 20.2975951904 44% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.1148189767 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 52.7272727273 106.682146367 49% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 9.68181818182 20.7667163134 47% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.18181818182 7.06120827912 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236298502335 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718212515313 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541690720859 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146491164476 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0148767014022 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.88 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.85 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 5.6 10.1190380762 55% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 6.0 10.7795591182 56% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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