Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
One of the highly controversial issues today relates to whether children should be encouraged to be competitive adults or that to instill a sense of co-operation would make them more useful as adults. I partially agree with both the opinions due to several reasons that I will discuss in greater detail in my essay.
On one side of the argument, there are people who argue that competition should be encouraged in youngsters, probably because of how competitive the world has gotten nowadays. People often have this opinion because many adults have troubles in the labor market, whether it is finding a job position or standing out among colleagues and build their own career. A second point is that, as a consequence of being competitive, kids will always strive for success and accomplishments. A particularly good example here is the way US and British school's system is structured, with children having to commit to studying and getting high grades in order to get into the best colleges. Ever since primary school, those kids are raised to compete with their fellow mates to enter the "Ivy League".
On the other hand, it is also possible to make the opposite argument. In fact, it is also argued that by raising ruthless kids, this will make them less useful adults to society. The main reason to support this is that competitive adults can have some difficulties in fitting into society, including using their good manners rather than make their way through it competitively. Cooperation goes hand in hand with collaboration, consequently children raised to be kind and collaborative with one another will have more chances to live a happy life inside the society.
Personally, I find myself standing in the middle of the argument. While being kind and collaborative are two important aspects of a person's character, I believe that in our society it is equally important to be competitive as well. One good illustration of this is the life of medical students and doctors themselves. Those people find themselves in a very competitive world, that requires to be ruthless sometimes. But, on the hand, compassion and collaboration are what make a doctor stand out among others, and help him in taking care of his patients.
Having discussed the most pertinent points of this issue, I feel that the only logical conclusion is that the advantages brought by being a little competitive and those of being able to cooperate have to be combined when raising a kid. Hence, I am partially inclined to the opinion that children need to be both competitive and collaborative.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, second, so, still, well, while, i feel, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 430.0 315.596192385 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01395348837 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91347738273 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537209302326 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 506.74238477 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5362443689 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.777777778 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8888888889 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24709216068 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716759085205 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680010835645 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146425595104 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666396189961 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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