Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
We are living in a competitive world where children should be motivated to have a sense of competition to deal with the challenging environment. Some people think that children should learn how to co-operate instead of competing with each other to become a helpful adults, while I would argue that competition is vital for achievements in all aspects of life.
It is certainly true that teaching cooperation to kids can be beneficial for them in many ways. Firstly, if we teach our children how to co-operate, they will develop social skills. These interpersonal skills can prove quite handy in their adult life, as many organizations are nowadays require good social skills alongside academics. Secondly, having empathy and making compromises are the qualities that are only learnt if people know how to co-operate rather than competing against each other. Both of these qualities are deemed necessary by many to create a peaceful environment, like to avoid wars between countries.
However, it is the sense of competition that helps children in every field of life, as the world is becoming competitive day by day. In past, while kids were taught at schools where they competed against each other to get good grades, the best among them got admission in the most prestigious universities around world. This trend of competition now begins even at the earlier stage. For example, a recent survey of all the primary schools in London shows that on average 6 to 7 students are competing against each, at present, to get admission in a primary school as compared to statistics of 2003 where only 2 students were competing against each other. Furthermore, a sense of competition is not only required to excel in academics but also for extra-curricular activities which can be adopted as a career later in life. For example, as the number of people taking part in Olympics is now more than ever before, many athletes start training themselves at early age to win the tournament.
In conclusion, while teaching cooperation to kids can be useful sometimes, I strongly believe that children should be motivated to become competitive. As, this helps them to become successful in every aspect of life.
- Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.To what extent do you agree or disagree? 67
- Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: required
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Suggestion: In the past
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05509641873 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87843856212 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539944903581 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7946713594 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.333333333 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299180357287 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954245050185 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768209228247 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194283724745 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726354408841 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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