Opinions are divided as to whether adolescents should spend their leisure time on helping the local community without payments or not. Some hold a belief that it merits not only individually but also socially. Personally, I completely disagree with this point of view.
For a variety of reasons, it would be wrong to force young students to do unpaid works for the local in their school break. Firstly, teenagers are at the age of learning and they have to meet quite a lot of deadlines for homework. If they take time out to do unrelated jobs, there will not be time left for their study and some other activities for the comprehensive development, such as doing extra - curriculum activities, playing sport and so forth. Therefore, occupying their little free time is obviously not proper and unfair. Secondly, teenagers may not be physically strong enough and lack the necessary labor skills. This may easily lead to unwanted accidents at workplaces. Finally, the local residents are able to ask for help from diverse resources even without any effort rather than taking advantage of the young, and it may yield a much better result.
In my opinion, adolescents who help their community as a workforce do not benefit from what they do and they even will be the low-quality employees in the future society. In fact, learning is the most effective way of generating a well-educated workforce for the contemporary economy and educating good citizens for a healthy society. Case in point, in numerous parts of Vietnam, the young aged around 15 to 20 are considering making ends meet top priority, and this situation is originating the fact that they are not qualified and skillful enough as requirements of most enterprises. As a result, their applications were denied because of lacking a sense of discipline and labor skills.
In conclusion, the choice of whether helping the local or not belongs to teenagers, but I believe that we should not require them to do works which are others' responsibility.
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It is often argued that…
It is often argued that teenagers should require to do voluntary community work which will help society and children in their careers. However, I completely disagree with this point of view because at this stage a child should give only focus to learn and develop their skills. This essay will discuss will multiple reasons for not forcing children to do unpaid works.
To begin with, pupils at the age of learning and going to schools have to meet their deadlines for their homework. So, they have a limited amount of time to study and enjoy their leisure time such as playing sports or indulging in any other extra-curricular activities. If they take time to do unrelated jobs in their free time, it would be unethical and will be treated as unfair for them. Moreover, teenagers are not physically strong for labor skills. For example, a child working in a factory with machinery-related work. It can be harmful to the company as well as to themselves. This kind of work may easily lead to accidents at workplaces. Finally, factory owners do not allow juveniles to work in such places and find experienced workers for their work.
Furthermore, community work will not provide any merits to adolescents. If a youngster will voluntarily work at the age of learning, they will become low-quality employees in the future. Hence, learning is the most effective way of generating a contemporary economy along with a well-educated workforce of workers that will result in a happy and healthy society.
To conclude, individuals should not hire child labor for their work because it will be impacted negatively on children and will not provide any benefits to the community.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 22, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
Opinions are divided as to whether adolescents should spend their leisure ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1676.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00298507463 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84690626531 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591044776119 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1823593622 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.733333333 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334919670695 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09633089792 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654550114926 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189316637746 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407612883883 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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