While some people believe that job oriented techniques and learnings ought to be demonstrated in universities, others feel that the institutions need to provide education without expressing concerns about the various courses for the bachelors. However, I believe, students have to be offered both vocational and academic educations. This essay will discuss both sides with relevant examples.
To begin with, giving professional trainings can prove beneficial for the students when most of them have already looked for specific jobs in the future. Moreover, around two-thirds of learners struggle to pay fees because the overall costs get expensive that often subsequently exert negative impact in their studies and livelihoods. Therefore, training in apprenticeship systems, which is one of the most common types of vocational trainings, allows learners to gain experiences and knowledge about a particular field. Not only would they learn essential skills but also students could receive salaries. What makes this type of method utterly reasonable is people sound remarkably confident and also, employers usually choose number one priority over these sorts of candidates in the work place compared to applicants holding only a degree. According to the study, in the UK, the 25 wealthiest people across all industries had tripled their fortunes from £2.7bn to £9.3bn since 2003. And 68% of them constituted the products of vocational courses.
On the other hand, the students should be flaunted with profound knowledge by the universities regardless of the particular courses as many students are often either still undecided about their careers or want to obtain a formal qualification. If they are compelled to enroll on a distinct course, there are higher possibilities that some students may suffer severe distress and grow completely disillusioned. So, gaining broad education from distinguished professors, specialists and the rest others, generally opens up countless opportunities for the coming days. Aspirants awarded with the university degrees earn considerably much higher salaries as opposed to job seekers who have undergone preliminary trainings.
To conclude, the institutions should offer both academic education and practical skills since they remain absolutely vital for the graduates in the course of time.
- Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 56
- Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree? 44
- learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. 73
- Mass Tourism has a negative effect on a country and should be discouraged. To what extent do you agree and disagree with this statement? 89
- Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries.While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages.Do you agree or disagree? 81
Essay evaluation report
What makes this type of method utterly reasonable is people sound remarkably confident
What makes this type of method utterly reasonable is that people sound remarkably confident
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 8.5 out of 9
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1941 1500
No. of Different Words: 229 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.53 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.915 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.875 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.502 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.058 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Dear sir, could you please
Dear sir, could you please comment on my task response and coherence? I am always worried by these two things. I look forward to your suggestions. Thank you sir.
We realized that you do this
We realized that you do this type of topics well:
some people believe that...other people think that...what is your opinion?
this type of topics has two sides for argument, you can do them very well because the arguments are clear.
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but once the topic is with one opinion, like:
The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.
the two sides for argument are not so clear, you may get confused and do it on the wrong way. so what to do?
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first, read the topic carefully. Don't rush to write something. There are 40 minutes for task II, you have enough time to think over the topic before you start writing.
second, try to figure out those two sides. for example the above topic:
one side: Yes, 'to have several careers' has advantages for some people nowadays. first, ....second....
However, another side: 'having a single career ' still has advantages too. first, ....second....
However is the key words to remind you that there are two sides for arguments.
Third, when you are developing the essay, be very careful don't go to a wrong track, stick to the topic always. We write the essay for the full topic, not for part of the topic or another topic. This is what 'coherence' means. mostly we use two reasons to support the sub-topic to keep the coherence: first, ....second....
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In your future essays, pick up some essay topics which you think it is hard to write, so we can closely monitor your performance.
Dear sir, I am very grateful
Dear sir, I am very grateful for your valuable comments. Thank you so much.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 729, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to numb', 'to number'
Suggestion: to numb; to number
...dent and also, employers usually choose number one priority over these sorts of candid...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, third, while, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1990.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.70200573066 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96563127219 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.670487106017 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4600908503 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.666666667 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2666666667 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191428319406 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511030557217 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519878409003 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113340090587 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324508793901 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.08 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.39 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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