Some people think that young people should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community. Are disadvantages of this requirement greater than the benefits for the community and individuals?
In today’s world, working a period without salary is one of the demands of youngsters to support society. This situation has a huge influence on various aspects not only of young adults but also the community.
On one hand, while individuals take a gap year without wage to practice their quality, they will receive different experience in different aspects. First and foremost, many burdens of company, society and government can be released. For instance, the office has enough time to evaluate the candidate's qualifications. Secondly, this is the synonym for financial assistance which can solve society’s problems. Moreover, citizens can create more and more relationships. Given the fact that, the more youngsters sacrifice for this work the more they can have sympathy for the poor in communities such as orphan, beggar and startup.
On the other hand, although advantageous in certain aspects, it also makes major drawbacks to young adults who just graduated from university. Specifically, youngsters gradually decline the passion in their career because of stress from the unaffordable cost of living. Besides that, work efficiency may be reduced when young adults don't have any motivation to promote their career. Instead of spending a period of time, they can practice other skill to prepare for the future job.
To sum up, a requirement to assume a period of unpair work supporting citizens in the community for youngsters causes both benefits and drawbacks. Therefore, the government have to create policies to control this situation and make the world a better place.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1347.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36653386454 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86550305535 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609561752988 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1436729396 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.2142857143 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9285714286 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78571428571 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150907179475 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476429125056 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048033905927 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0925913084495 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403848199934 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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