Some people think that young people should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is argue that many younger can do volunteer activities for disability people who need help in society. Therefore, they can get to some advantages but from my point of view, I strongly believe that the drawbacks outweigh the benefits.
On the one hand, this work may influence on their family and times, specially younger are students. Firstly, it is unnecessary and waste of time of pupils which important for study and help their parents. The main reason is that need a huge amount of time so will set aside their free time. Therefore, the quality of education may effect significantly and cause some problems such as get bad mark or retest exam…Secondly, it is definitely pay much money if required young people do unpaid work which they do not have a host of and now must get support from their parents. For instance, many staple products need prepared and payed for predicaments people like rice, clothes, medicine, …Not only husband of finance, but they also feed boring when must do mandatory activities.
On the other hand, government must have responsibility for help and support disability people while younger only bring little benefits to them. Nevertheless, helping them can get some advantages and contribute to the community. Younger will have experience and learn something to increase the morals or behaviors. Moreover ,due to this, it can spread this volunteer activities to other people.
In conclusion, I completely with my opinion. Although do unpaid work will have the advantages but there are some drawbacks to young people to do charity work such as wasting of time or money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1347.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04494382022 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75938728386 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565543071161 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9519531491 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.615384615 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9230769231 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309327020081 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100783784255 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114869948431 0.0667982634062 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214884829668 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0878021726761 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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