Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
There is an argument that nowadays, the lifespan of humans lasts longer if being compared to the past, therefore the retirement age should be higher than it used to be. Personally, I totally agree with this statement because of the rationale following.
First of all, the worth mentioning here is that the change in the old regulation will be a benefit to people who have difficulties. To be more specific, the pension in some countries, mainly in developing ones, is not enough for them to get by when they retire, especially those who have not paid off their mortgages or they are still supporting their children. Hence, working is the only way to handle the problem and have a better life. Take Viet Nam as an example, for the manual labour, the pension is just about 1 million Vietnam dong, which can only be used for the basic demands such as food and drink, but not assist them to pay any debts if they have.
Moreover, the increase in the retirement age is an effective method since this change is able to limit crime rates. If people retire too early and the money subsidized by governments is not enough for their life, crimes will definitely appear. To illustrate, currently, some elders are being used for taking money from the public by criminals. The bad guys cause them to disguise themselves into the homeless and ask for cash at public places such as the park, the gas station and the bus stop. At the end of the day, the elderly will come back to the lair to give money to the thugs. Consequently, old people, which is sometimes considered the wisest members of the community, are being abused. So, the retirement age should be raised in order for them to contribute their intelligence and expertise to society while they are still working. As a result, criminal cases would decline and the fabric of society would be stabilized.
In conclusion, to reduce the risk of crimes and create a better life for individuals, policymakers should raise the age of retirement due to the longer lifespan of them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71549295775 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56616471586 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56338028169 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9502146047 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.6 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215601319161 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703139295305 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422186593587 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138619990987 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400571917854 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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