Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which they retire from work should be raised considerably.
To extent do you agree or disagree?
Currently, in many countries, the age at which people stop paid work tends to be between 55 and 65. In the past, with few people living beyond the age of 80, it was rare for anybody to enjoy more than 20 years of retirement. However nowadays, that figure is much more likely to 30, or even 40 years. Because of this, some people argue that the age at which people retire from paid work should be raised significantly. In my opinion, I believe that raising the retirement age serves no real purpose as it would lead to unemployment among the young ones and will result in dissatisfaction among the elderly because of limited time available to pursue other interests or hobbies.
Disadvocates of this point of view claim that rasing the age at which people retire can exacerbate unemployment rates among younger workers. Raising the retirement age means older workers remain in their jobs for extended tenures, leaving younger people with fewer vacancies to fill. For example, the proportion of manufacturing workers over the age of 55 in South Korea has risen nearly two-fold from 16 to 30 percent in the last ten years. This has been mainly attributed to older workers refusing to retire and government policy related to the retirement age, leading to millions of younger people failing to find work in the manufacturing industry.
Besides, I believe that retired people can have more time to pursue their own interests or contribute a great deal through sharing in family responsibilites such as child care. Thank to longer life expectancy, they can utilize to start their new hobbies, spend more time for themselves. Raising the retirement age will make them unhappy because of limited time available.
In conclusion, while permitting older people to enter the workforce can afford them greater financial independence, it can also put younger laborers in a difficult position in terms of finding work. That is why I believe that we should maintain the current requirement age and allow people to flourish in different ways when they finish paid employment.
- The table below shows the results of survey in 2000 2005 and 2010 about one university Summar e the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant 73
- Some say that because many people are living much longer the age at which they retire from work should be raised considerably To extent do you agree or disagree 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...enjoy more than 20 years of retirement. However nowadays, that figure is much more like...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72894367581 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56976744186 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5780152067 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.857142857 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328109431621 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120115101866 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105925768418 0.0667982634062 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185333551164 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0973191269605 0.056905535591 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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