Some Say music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?
Many believe that music, art and drama should be considered equal in importance to the other school subjects, particularly in the early years of learning. I completely agree with this idea for their crucial part in brain development and their ability to bring joy and entertainment to the students.
First of all, those three subjects can help young minds to develop their imagination and to see things in a different way. Many studies have shown that music and art can provide an enormous boost to the development of neuronal connections in the brain. For instance, a child who plays the piano will have way more dexterity and ability to control his fine movements than other children.
Moreover, music, art and drama can provide a great source of entertainment and happiness to students of all ages. They can play as a great hobby for children to fill their extra time without feeling bored or tired, unlike other school subjects. For example, many students find the drama and the theater as a very enjoyable activity to practice in their leisure time.
Another advantage of youngsters studying art related subjects is that it could enhance their social skills and boost their confidence. Usually, arts and music involve group activities and performing in front of an audience. In doing so, students can learn how to cooperate with each other and it can heighten their confidence and relive their anxiety.
In conclusion, music, art, and drama are essential for students at the school level, as they help the growth of their brains and to develop their confidence and to provide a wonderful hobby and entertainment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1362.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04444444444 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.655439328 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566666666667 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.2564976963 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 113.5 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58333333333 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200990021537 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0812539391691 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710066006347 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128276312224 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542852538702 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.