Some say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their spare time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In this contemporary era, some parents believe that their adoloscent should get involved in well prepared group activites in their leisure time, while others argue that it is important to learn how to use that free time for themselves. I strongly believe that, kids should get merged with group and do usefull activities in their leisure time, nevertheless, the discourse ahead will discuss both the views before reaching to an appropriate solution.
One of the reason for being involved in group activites in free time is that it boosts the self confidence while exposing to others. By having debate with a group of individuals will not only boosts confidence but also gets courageous in thought process without having inside fear. For instance, a person who is alone is less talkative then an individual who lives in groups. Another reason is that it freshn up ones mind and feels energetic, when getting in contact with the more numbers of people in their leisure time. To illustrate, as per recent survery, the person who got indulged in groups have more brodening of mind and feels amazing in contrast to the person who is living alone.
On the other hand, there is a section of society who feels that children have to give time to themselves in their free time. Firstly, adoloscent will occupy themselves to some unusal tasks that will affect their minds, which will latter have adverse effect in the nearer future. For example, parents give their children a mobile phone during free time for mind diversion. Secondly, Adoloscents should occupy themselves to learn new things like cooking and all which results in better availability of resources when going in outside world.
To conclude, there indeed are those in the society who believes with that fact that individuals should give time to themselves in their leisure and they assumingly, have all the point to backed up. I, however, am of the firm opinion that, while spending free time in groups not only boosts confidence but also refresh mind.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 193, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'will' requires base form of the verb: 'boost'
Suggestion: boost
...th a group of individuals will not only boosts confidence but also gets courageous in ...
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Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...a person who is alone is less talkative then an individual who lives in groups. Anot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, in contrast to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 7.30460921844 287% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1679.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9821958457 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48737976353 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528189910979 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.2587448145 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.153846154 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9230769231 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6153846154 7.06120827912 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301389809146 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116183980951 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904964763627 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20006366794 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0982861413785 0.056905535591 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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