Some students choose to work or travel after leaving school and before going to university. Many people, however, say that working experience is more useful in adult life than travel.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is reported that several students, when they leave their school and (are) in the process of preparing for university, decide to work or execute (Pursure) their hobbies, such as travel. Some people argue that it is a good choice for young adults to go to work rather than to have a trip to some destinations as working will help them to gain more useful experience for their later life. Personally, I strongly disagree with this statement due to (the) reasons discussed below.
First of all, travelling can still help young generations to gain some helpful knowledge. When a teenager determines to go around the world or just travel domestically, this is a good opportunity for him to explore a new world and discovery (discover) some practical understandings that going to work sometimes cannot provide. Take (the) marketing field as an example. In this industry, the most important thing is to collect the insight of the end users and create an appropriate campaign that can touch their heart(s) and persuade them to purchase the product. However, that insight can never be gained from any company, and even the marketers have to travel around to observe and collect it. Hence, it is a good chance for adults to broaden their views and perspectives related to the real life by going on a trip. Additionally, the time used for transferring from a high school to a university is completely short for a student to have a job and for a firm to train a new employee.
In addition to the lifeful knowledge that a student can gain from the travel time, he can also have a good occasion to relax and he can find a suitable future path for him if he is lucky. First and foremost, graduating from high school means that the students in general are just about 18 years old and that age seems to be too soon for them to absorb numerous practical understandings. Working sooner can interrupt the youth of those students because they have to experience the harsh world of mature people. Furthermore, when going around the world, if they are lucky, those adults will see a new career path that fully fit(s) them. For instance, when a person travels with his family, he may see that he wants to be a tour guide rather than working as a marketer. This new discovery may somehow assist that person to re-structure the overall plan and lead him to a righter and brighter way.
In summary, I am convinced that having a job after graduating a high school and before going to a university is not a good choice for a student and I fully disagree with this statement. Besides, I do believe that travel will be much better for those students since it assists them to explore new practical knowledge and discover an accurate future path as well.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 295, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'work'.
Suggestion: sometimes work
... practical understandings that going to work sometimes cannot provide. Take the marketing fiel...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, still, well, for instance, in addition, in general, in summary, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2234.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 481.0 315.596192385 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64449064449 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6289554673 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47817047817 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.1849894664 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.111111111 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7222222222 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27777777778 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330658547298 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102265180905 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749163706424 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232773788385 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768910602597 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 295, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'work'.
Suggestion: sometimes work
... practical understandings that going to work sometimes cannot provide. Take the marketing fiel...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, still, well, for instance, in addition, in general, in summary, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2234.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 481.0 315.596192385 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64449064449 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6289554673 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47817047817 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.1849894664 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.111111111 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7222222222 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27777777778 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330658547298 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102265180905 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749163706424 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232773788385 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768910602597 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.