Students leave high school without learning the way how to manage their money What are the reasons and solutions of this issue

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Students leave high school without learning the way how to manage their
money. What are the reasons and solutions of this issue?

It is believed that students do not know how to get by on managing their money
after graduating from high school. This problem could be caused by a number of
following factors which could be solved by possible measures.
There are several reasons why high school graduates are unable to control their
budgets efficiently. First, lacking courses involved in necessary social skills,
including how to manage their own money gives rise to a great number of high
school leavers not being able to handle their spending. It seems that
the school’s curricula focus mainly on transmitting knowledge via academic
subjects such as Mathematics, Biology, Physics while neglecting the
indispensability of teaching soft skills to learners. Furthermore, that high school
graduates have difficulties in taking control of financial affairs is brought
about by the overprotection of their parents. It is seeable that quite a few parents
consider their children to be still baby boys or girls. As a result, they do not force
their children to make money on their own, they even give them an allowance
monthly. Thus, most school graduates are incapable of understanding properly the
values of money and do spend their money in an unwise way.
Therefore, a number of following actions should be taken to eradicate the problem
described above. One immediate measure is for education system to modify their
syllabuses by adding financial literacy courses. These courses will enable students
to make effective use of their money instead of misspending it. Besides, the
parental influence on their children is of concern. Parents ought to allow, also
encourage their children to look for part-time jobs in order that their kids will
realize the critical values of money.
In conclusion, it is such a severe issue that students lack skills of financial
management, which could be tackled by the involvement of schools and families.

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Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 73, Rule ID: A_GREAT_NUMBER_OF_NN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'highs'?
Suggestion: highs
...n money gives rise to a great number of high school leavers not being able to handl...
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Line 16, column 42, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an unwise way" with adverb for "unwise"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...alues of money and do spend their money in an unwise way. Therefore, a number of following acti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, if, look, so, still, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36156351792 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78319272832 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589576547231 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8686677587 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.733333333 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 25.0 4.38176352705 571% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308679116756 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104690756081 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805029812121 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0808295224627 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073397256037 0.056905535591 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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