To succeed in a business, one needs to know maths. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
The idea that having a profound in mathematics is such a huge advantage in a business remains a source of controversy. While a number of people agree with this view, I would argue that other skills are of paramount importance to succeed in business.
On the one hand, there are various merits when people have a good foundation in maths. The first benefit is that understanding the concept of maths could help people more logical in the thinking process. As a result, they would be more likely to make an optimal decision in a second without taking a lot of time to think. Secondly, when it comes to calculating, employees who are excel at maths could find it easy to use an application for making the calculation, such as excel, in computer to resolve some works related to money. This application requires staff to have a basic knowledge of maths to create some formation and code. Therefore, it is obvious that individuals who are good at maths are more beneficial in the area of business.
On the other hand, I would contend that there are other skills including communication and management are indispensable. In terms of communication, it is undoubted that in the field of business, people have to make conversations with their customers on a daily basis. Without a good skill of interacting with others, people who work in the business would be faced with some troubles. This make lead to a misunderstand or even dissatisfaction between customers and workers. Regarding management skills, people who take a lead in a particular company like bosses or administrators have to know this skill. Having an in-deep in maths is insufficient to be a business success. If a president does not know how to manage his corporation in harmonious ways, it would cause some damaging consequences.
In conclusion, whereas others believe that to climb a career ladder in business, one had better know maths, it seems to me that various skills are crucial in contributing to the business.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 372, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...when it comes to calculating, employees who are excel at maths could find it easy to us...
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Line 2, column 380, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'excelled'.
Suggestion: excelled
...comes to calculating, employees who are excel at maths could find it easy to use an a...
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Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...d with some troubles. This make lead to a misunderstand or even dissatisfaction between custome...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1645.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89583333333 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00693495256 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520833333333 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9649980679 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.8125 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161913070386 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549023395718 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03878125596 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101394441395 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358916536979 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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