It is undeniable that numerous commercial advertising campaigns have been conducted to attract children. While some people argue that such advertisements are informative and beneficial for youngsters, I believe that they are unnecessary and disadvantageous for children.
On the one hand, some corporations confirm that the objective of their marketing activities is merely to inform the children about a range of choices of products. When promoting the products, they suppose that their information can provide adequate knowledge to help youngsters to make appropriate decisions when purchasing their goods. For example, when a chocolate bar is launched, children can only learn about the chemical ingredients and nutrients of this product via commercial advertisements, which may hardly be found in the conventional lectures of their educational institutions. Hence, if this information is not frequently imparted to the youngster, they would enter adult life without these useful skills.
On the other hand, I concur with the argument that parents should be wary of the marketing campaigns that are increasingly exposed to their children. Firstly, the children have inadequate experience in market judgments. They are likely to be swayed by several forms of advertisements, especially celebrity endorsement, including the glamorous appearance of their favorite celebrities. For instance, the introduction of new designer products along with the presence of famous superstars can effectively stimulate youngsters to squander their savings, especially when some of their friends have already possessed these items. Secondly, youngsters should be allowed to experience the simplicity of their childhood instead of facing the complications of financial problems, because the pressure of consumption is an inevitable consequence of modern life.
In conclusion, I agree with the opinion that the advertising companies are exerting many pressures on the choices of consumption of children, which may be unnecessary for their childhood.
- More and more people today are choosing to eat only healthy food and are making time to exercise regularly Why is this What can be done to encourage other people to eat only healthy food and to make time to exercise regularly 67
- Task 2 Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country while some people think it is bad Discuss both views and state your opinion 89
- Task 2 Today children and teenagers are committing more crimes Why is this case How should they be punished 89
- Task 2 In some countries if people need to find work they have to move away from their families and their friends Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages 73
- Task 2 An increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment Why is this the case and what solutions are possible 84
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.90202702703 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27085480313 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584459459459 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3362418007 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.583333333 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214058313654 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08721754122 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647993828167 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153255320649 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645069612586 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.0946893788 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.24 12.4159519038 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.0 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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