Task2 question
Smoking tobacco is becoming increasingly popular among young people with potentially serious effects on their health. Explain some reasons for this problem and suggest some possible solution.
These days, there has been a progressive increase in the way youngsters smoke cigarette, which may predispose them to adverse health challenges. Incessant advertisement of tobacco and peer pressure are some of the reasons why youths take to smoking. However, these problems could be addressed by laws regulating companies on adverts, and restriction of adolescents from associating with friends that will negatively influence them.
There are various reasons why young people have increasingly engaged in smoking. Firstly, it could be as a result of incessant advertisement of tobacco by the firm. Most companies are known for promoting their products using celebrities, which young individuals try to emulate. Youngsters are easily enticed mostly by what they see others doing, especially people they hold on high esteem as role models. Secondly, increase in the rate of smoking among youths could also be as a result of peer pressure. Young individuals are easily swayed by attitudes of their friends, which in some cases may have negative effect on them. For instance, teens are always seen striving to be like their mates. Some take to smoking simply because their associates are doing it.
Nevertheless, these aforementioned challenges could be ameliorated by taking some steps. First and foremost, the government should enact laws to regulate the advertisement by tobacco companies. This will go a long way to curtail the use of role models in promoting harmful substances, such as tobacco. Also, on the part of peer pressure, parents should restrict their children from associating with friends who would inadvertently lure them into immoral behaviors.
In conclusion, having considered advertisement of tobacco, especially using prominent individuals by the tobacco corporations, and the negative impact from friends as some of the reasons that have led to frequent smoking among youths, I believe this issue could be solved by government making rules and regulations to checkmate adverts from tobacco companies. Also, parents should watch out on the kind of friends their children move with.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, as to, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1790.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49079754601 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93390756797 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546012269939 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.9495497709 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.294117647 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1764705882 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94117647059 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236401218888 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762587775915 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406317475309 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146026051405 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418535189149 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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