The tendency for human beings to follow one another is shown in the popularity of fashions in clothing and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.
In this dazzling world, people are under the influence of glamour and materialism. Presently, it is noticed that people tend to follow the similar trends of wearing outfits and buying electronic gadgets. Here, i would like to firmly agree with this statement.
There are numerous points to endorse my view. First and foremost, the sense of competitiveness encourages masses to adopt the similar styles of fads. To demonstrate, a massive number of people believe that their status would be under rated if they do not have same possessions for clothes and consumer durables which are owned by other members of society. Thus, the race of competing each other leads to imitation.
What is more, nowadays, a large number of people have tendency to buy the products, cosmetics and other accessories that are endorsed by their favourite celebrities. Taking a real life example into consideration, at present, The products such as Kent water purifier, Boost energy drink and Oppo camera phone are advertised by the renown celebrities like Hema Malini, Virat Kohli and Ranvir Singh. Consequently, unlike other things, such consumer goods are selling like hot cakes and it ultimately develops similarity in the buying behaviour of people.
In addition, people who buy different things than others are, sometime, claimed to be outdated and less aware about the modernity. Therefore, everyone is supposed to be in the same race of goods ownership. Last but not least, in many countries, people having same cast, category or religion are subjected to follow the similar ways of living for sake of cultural preservation.
To recapitulate, lifestyle is advancing by leaps and bounds. In this contemporary world, imitation in terms of fashion and ways of living has been the essence of modern societies.
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Comments
Rate my essay sir,
Rate my essay sir,
As i firmly agree and made three body para for it and i did not write body para for disagree ? Is it a concern
Or
It is good to choose only one side and make three body para for it ?
Earlier if i agree, i was making two paras for it and one body para for disgree by writing others have conflicting views
They think that
How about this approach ?
Essay evaluation report
for sake of cultural preservation.
for the sake of cultural preservation.
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regarding your questions, there are no fixed rules for essays writings. whatever it is good for the topic, it is fine. in most conditions, 4 paragraphs with two sides are suggested according to the feedback.
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flaws:
'is/are' are over used across the essay. for example, in the essay body:
What is more, nowadays, a large number of people have tendency to buy the products, cosmetics and other accessories that are endorsed by their favourite celebrities.
Taking a real life example into consideration, at present, The products such as Kent water purifier, Boost energy drink and Oppo camera phone are advertised by the renown celebrities like Hema Malini, Virat Kohli and Ranvir Singh.
Consequently, unlike other things, such consumer goods are selling like hot cakes and it ultimately develops similarity in the buying behaviour of people.
In addition, people who buy different things than others are, sometime, claimed to be outdated and less aware about the modernity.
Therefore, everyone is supposed to be in the same race of goods ownership.
Last but not least, in many countries, people having same cast, category or religion are subjected to follow the similar ways of living for sake of cultural preservation.
and more...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 288 350
No. of Characters: 1457 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.12 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.059 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.658 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.923 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.291 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.576 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.029 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
6.5 doesnt seem a justifiable
6.5 doesnt seem a justifiable score to this essay on behalf of
The only concern of are repetition.
I think ur marking is over strict and it discourages to writers
Yes, it is very strict. It
Yes, it is very strict. It may get higher marks in the actual exam.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of wearing outfits and buying electronic gadgets. Here, i would like to firmly ag...
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Line 3, column 212, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...s and buying electronic gadgets. Here, i would like to firmly agree with this st...
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Line 5, column 229, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: underrated
...ople believe that their status would be under rated if they do not have same possessions fo...
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Line 7, column 25, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... imitation. What is more, nowadays, a large number of people have tendency to buy the product...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, so, therefore, thus, in addition, such as, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26388888889 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80197791692 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638888888889 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4941438352 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.066666667 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145160158047 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0429618092509 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494643425525 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.074865350301 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309158813096 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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