There are social medical and technical problems associated with the use of mobile phones. What form do they take? Do you agree that the problems outweigh the benefits of mobile phones?
In recent decades, advancements in the field of technology have had various impacts on our society, particularly the development of technical devices such as smartphones. While the benefits we can reap from them are becoming indispensable to our lives, particular social dilemmas associated with our overdependent on them are raising the level of wariness of many people to this problem. In my opinion, however, though the disadvantages they brought might be overwhelming, I believe that the benefits they provide can justify the issue for the following reasons.
First and foremost, it is indeed true that many problems have arisen due to the appearance of electronic devices, for instance, the addicting nature of such objects. Nowadays, people's primary choices for leisure are usually surfing the net or putting on their headphones for video games. However, uncoordinate time usage to such entertainment can lead to a sedentary lifestyle that is unbeneficial to a person's health, both physically and mentally, since they discourage participation in healthier activities. In addition to that, many studies have shown that the wireless signal computers and smartphones create cause substantial damage to the neurological organs of humans. Hence, they increase the chance of various health problems such as obesity, myopia, and amnesia. Additionally, addiction to mobile phones also leads to individualistic behaviors, resulting in communication breakdowns between many people, especially in families. It has become a general burden to parents as they face a predicament, struggling to balance the screen time of their children while they resist, worsening the relationships between family members.
On the opposite end of the spectrum, such achievements have played a pivotal role in the development of civilization. The evolution from a simple cellphone to a modern smartphone has turned it into an irreplaceable assistant to many people's lives. For instance, through its calling and chatting function, it has shortened the time needed and extended the distance of communication considerably, allowing us to connect with others from length up to half a globe. Its effect has shown notably during times of turmoil like the pandemic when entertainment, businesses, and education have depended on it significantly due to the lockdown. Additionally, its hand has extended its reach to fields such as information and medicine. The smartphone has become the gateway to the internet, where its indispensability cannot be any clearer to individuals like students and scientists, whose occupations rely greatly on data. The quick contact it brings allows hospitals to react rapidly to emergencies, and the development of its hardware is also related to the improvement of medical infrastructures. Moreover, it is worth noting that the majority, if not all of the social dilemmas this device is guilty of is usually because of over-usage, which is our problem.
In conclusion, the smartphone has had various impacts on our society. While it is undeniable that its hand has aroused many difficulties in our civilization, its usefulness and its role are undeniable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 404, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ary lifestyle that is unbeneficial to a persons health, both physically and mentally, s...
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Line 3, column 778, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... has become the gateway to the internet, where its indispensability cannot be any...
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Line 3, column 1146, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... worth noting that the majority, if not all of the social dilemmas this device is guilty o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 41.998997996 174% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.3376753507 276% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2674.0 1615.20841683 166% => OK
No of words: 485.0 315.596192385 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51340206186 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25394272646 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 176.041082164 155% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562886597938 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 855.9 506.74238477 169% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7840878804 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.7 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121399464174 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0318407797087 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365992163131 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.068405189011 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422360294572 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.33 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 169.0 78.4519038076 215% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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